I say “Write,”
But he cannot write.
He can think,
He can work,
I say “It’s about you,” “It is you,”
“You cannot be wrong.”
But he doesn’t
know if he’s right.
For he,
Cannot write.
And he knows that’s wrong.
He cannot
spell,
And he doesn’t
want to try.
I say, “Spell,”
“And later we’ll
fix it,”
“It’ll be fine.”
I say, “Write about your skills,”
“Your dreams.”
He tells me he has none.
He really does believe,
That he has none.
I stop at this,
Confused,
Not convinced.
I reward my ignorance.
Must there really be something he can do,
Which nobody else can do?
Of course, he too, wishes for this world –
That I refuse not to assume exists.
He must want dreams,
And a yellow-brick road.
But there is land,
Hundreds of miles south of that golden path.
And he is not sure,
That two steps in the right direction are worth the
effort.
He thinks it may be better to get used to the forest,
And The Darkness,
Ruling over him.
It somehow seems efficient.
But two months later I receive an email from him that
says “hey hows it goin”.
And if he ever asks me how far lost in the forest you
can be,
I’ll remember the answer is: “half-way.”
Brian,
ReplyDeleteThis is a great piece of poetry! I loved how you formatted it, centering each word as though you were trying to show the student his center and where he should begin looking inside himself for inspiration for his writing.
I also think it's great that you keep in contact with the student and that he is comfortable coming to you and sharing his ideas, hopes, dreams, and fears. Isn't that what we are all here for? To be mentors and light a spark in each of our students to fuel them to reach their goals in life, whatever they may be?
Thank you for sharing this piece. I hope that your student finds the path he's looking for and it leads him to great happiness.
Brian,
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed your poetic genre reflection. I love how this poem illustrates how our job as teachers or even student-teachers is not always easy. Our students' brains are blank canvases and sometimes they need assistance choosing the color, brushes, or even the image it is they are going to paint; and sometimes they would rather not paint at all. I did not pick up on the formatting, but now that Stephanie has pointed it out I think it is very fitting with the message you are trying to portray.
Thank you & Happy Blogging, Destinee Manns
Thank you Brian,
ReplyDeletethis was an exceptional piece of poetry. I was able to relate to very easily. having students who feel like that can't achieve something is hard to deal with, and you capture that feeling with ease in your writing. The brush strokes that you used were fantastic, and I enjoyed every line of this piece.
Thanks again for sharing this.
I look forward to seeing what else you publish.
Brian,
ReplyDeleteThank you for sharing your poem. I really appreciate the thoughtfulness and creativity you pour into your work. This poem seems to capture the concerns we all have as writers, and having been through writing instruction, we know students will face some of the same struggles. This would be a good poem to share with your students prior to a creative writing assignment.
Best Regards,
Lindsay
Someone's got a real knack for poetry! I really enjoyed reading your genre reflection Brian and there are so many fascinating elements in your work to be noted. The lines are relatively short, yet the actual context of your work projects the difficulties of being a teacher. There are so many students out there who just want to relinquish any hopes of succeeding and we can't be frustrated with them; just patient and supportive. Thanks for sharing and I'm looking forward to your next piece.
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